Cross Training Questions

hi i am 15 and am writing a story just for something to do im not pro so plz tell me what u think of story?

Public Comments

1. there you go again, wasting bandwidth
2. I didn't read all of it, because there were so many conventional errors that it was very frustrating to read.
3. Really work on your spelling and grammar, and try to break it up a bit - people don't want to read through such big blocks of text all the time. You may not be a pro, but no one will take you seriously if you don't take the time to, say, capitalise letters. Big point - a new paragraph whenever someone new starts speaking. It's rather confusing otherwise.
4. to be honest i did not read it all, your spelling and grammar is appalling and that makes reading what you write very very difficult. Try re-writing it after having improved your spelling and grammar, and put in some paragraphs eh?